America, I think you're great
But you've made so many mistakes
America, why do you lie?
Why do you spy?
Why does your security have to come at the cost of life?
Why do you send us, newborns, to die?
Why do we have to fight?
America, why do you lie?
When is the land of freedom gonna be free?
When will people not have to flee?
When will there finally be peace and harmony?
What about unity?
Where's all your opportunity? Where's OUR opportunity?
America, stop lying
Please, just stop hating
Stop discriminating
Stop indoctrinating
Stop incriminating
America, you're not the only one
You're not the number one
Our war would've never begun
Had you never pulled out your big guns
DON'T LAUGH AT ME
BY THE WAY I DON'T KNOW WHY MY BLOG'S IN PORTUGUESE SO I'M SORRY I DON'T MEAN TO FORCE YOU TO HAVE TO SPEAK MY LANGUAGE, PEOPLE
I love your poem its sounds like a spoken word poem and it rhymes so yeah good job :)
ResponderExcluirI like how you throw sooooo many big words in your poem and it rhymes(:
ResponderExcluiryou should publish this poem. Very intricate.
ResponderExcluirI like how you've pointed out the flaws in America society, and it rhymes so yeah that's a plus! :D
ResponderExcluir*Insert facebook thumbs up* Eres un poeta. So pwetty and grr.
ResponderExcluirI pretty much love this because it holds no punches and speaks the truth on a lot of issues that people are blind to. Social critique is the key to improving society, and it's about time we have more people speaking up about the issues that this country most definitely faces. I love how you started with "America I think you're great". In a way it's like you're trying to soften the ass kicking you're about to give.
ResponderExcluirI really enjoy your poem i find it truthful rational
ResponderExcluirTHIS IS PURE GENIUS. I LOVE THE TRUTHFULNESS AND THE HONESTY AND THE RHYTHM AND THE EMOTION.
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